Not really getting what the bookwrap thing is. I liked the way you used yellow paper with your cover on the one you brought to class where it’s smaller than the cover image. I’ve never really liked the cover image… it’s just kind of an ugly photo to me. This may seem too obvious… but I would enjoy simply seeing a photo of the establishment on the cover. Especially with the way this one is sandwiched between two taller buildings. It would just look cool.
As for the magazine, I really enjoy reading the descriptions and interviews/reviews and stuff. I think that’s what make this a compelling project. And I think it’s got a pretty nice flow overall.
I don’t like where you’ve made the letter spacing tighter. Just a preference thing. I also think the way the images are so big and overlapping gets claustrophobic. I understand the style and I think it works well in certain places (like spread 16-17 where you put it on a yellow BG) but with so many of the pages like that, it starts to make me feel uncomfortable.
I’m noticing a few spelling/grammar errors but I think I heard you say you’ve got someone on that.
I think this looks really nice .I cant wait to see more issues, I think that it will show how this all works as a publication that changes, not just a one issue thing.
If you’re going to have section breaks/chapter openers, etc, I would keep them all in the same spot. Either right hand page or left hand page. i.e. in other words, I’d switch the “some faces” spread. It keeps a consistency for the reader.
My one concern with the pacing is I would like to see more emphasis on the owners, Alejandro & Micaela, somehow. Maybe its the way the photographs are arranged–it looks as if Alejandro is cut off. And in the next page the customers are shown a little larger (or at least arranged so), which seems odd to me, as its all about celebrating the owners, and their courage to start the business and keep it going, right? I’d try reworking that page or section to give them a little more presence.
Also, as I mentioned in class, I agree with Chris. You have all the right things in the works… once you have a few issues under your belt that’s when everything will come together.
also, the “jacket” is that yellow piece i had on the book in class. it’s smaller than the book, and will hold all the text for the cover. a photo will be underneath on both front and back (like the first and last page in the book pdf.)
Not really getting what the bookwrap thing is. I liked the way you used yellow paper with your cover on the one you brought to class where it’s smaller than the cover image. I’ve never really liked the cover image… it’s just kind of an ugly photo to me. This may seem too obvious… but I would enjoy simply seeing a photo of the establishment on the cover. Especially with the way this one is sandwiched between two taller buildings. It would just look cool.
As for the magazine, I really enjoy reading the descriptions and interviews/reviews and stuff. I think that’s what make this a compelling project. And I think it’s got a pretty nice flow overall.
I don’t like where you’ve made the letter spacing tighter. Just a preference thing. I also think the way the images are so big and overlapping gets claustrophobic. I understand the style and I think it works well in certain places (like spread 16-17 where you put it on a yellow BG) but with so many of the pages like that, it starts to make me feel uncomfortable.
I’m noticing a few spelling/grammar errors but I think I heard you say you’ve got someone on that.
Really looking forward to more issues.
I think this looks really nice .I cant wait to see more issues, I think that it will show how this all works as a publication that changes, not just a one issue thing.
can you make a quick mock-up for the book jacket? i am a little lost just looking on the pdf.
Looks good Sarah!
A few things–
If you’re going to have section breaks/chapter openers, etc, I would keep them all in the same spot. Either right hand page or left hand page. i.e. in other words, I’d switch the “some faces” spread. It keeps a consistency for the reader.
My one concern with the pacing is I would like to see more emphasis on the owners, Alejandro & Micaela, somehow. Maybe its the way the photographs are arranged–it looks as if Alejandro is cut off. And in the next page the customers are shown a little larger (or at least arranged so), which seems odd to me, as its all about celebrating the owners, and their courage to start the business and keep it going, right? I’d try reworking that page or section to give them a little more presence.
Also, as I mentioned in class, I agree with Chris. You have all the right things in the works… once you have a few issues under your belt that’s when everything will come together.
definitely taking all these things into consideration, thanks so much for your comments!
also, the “jacket” is that yellow piece i had on the book in class. it’s smaller than the book, and will hold all the text for the cover. a photo will be underneath on both front and back (like the first and last page in the book pdf.)